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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#government #money #railways #roads
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There is an opinion asserting that spending
money
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 on the
construction
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 of new
railways
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 is more important than new
roads
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. While I agree that the
construction
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 of new
railways
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 is important, I suppose that facilitating
roads
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 is
also
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 essential for cities.
To begin
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 with, the more
railways
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 construct the more
people
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 will be transported from one
place
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 to another
place
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.
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 to say
,
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 if government allocate large amounts of
money
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 for the
construction
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 of new
railways
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 the result will probably be a large number of transportation.
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,
railways
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 have high-speed trains which have a high quality. A good illustration of
this
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 is the new
railways
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 for fast trains which carry more
people
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 from one
place
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 to another
place
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 in a shorter period of time.
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 in turn will lead to a dramatic decline in traffic issues.
On the other hand
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,
roads
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 are one of the most vital means of transportation.
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 to say, if the administration allots more
money
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 for the establishment of new
roads
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, the result will be more accessible to all sections of the city. More specifically, with the
construction
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 of new
roads
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,
people
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 have a lot of choices to access their destination which may have a significant influence on traffic problems.
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, in cities which have a widened road network
people
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 experience more comfortable and easier travel from somewhere to another
place
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. To conclude, there are clear benefits to the development of a new rail line.
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, I do not believe that spending
money
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 on railway
construction
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 is more urgent than road development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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