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Band 3.5

Because many problems we face today affect our whole planet, good relationships between countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#face #planet #relationships #countries
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problems
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which
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we face are global
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they
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they
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whole
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 world. There are
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 several reasons I believe that
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 it is of the utmost importance that countries have
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 relationship with each other.
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variety
veriety
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variety
 of
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as
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 drought ,
deforastration
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deforestation
 , contamination and so on.
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Unfortunately
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Unfortunately
, the number of acute
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are
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accelareting
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accelerating
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countries
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countries
 should unite with each other
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 ever before .The relationship among countries
have
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 to consolidate , so they can tackle
such
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problems
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instance
instanse
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instance
, in 2009 the famous actress Gisel
Bunchen
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Bundchen
 motivated her colleagues to halt
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deforestation
 .
Cosequently
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Consequently
, they cooperate with each other and assist her to modify cutting trees in Brazil.
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this
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 she spent millions of dollars to support
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nature .
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devastating
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government
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the government
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 could not overcome
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 problem. The secondary problem is that ,
producing
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weapons
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are
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 increasing day by
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.
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, all humanity would be dead , by
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missiles
.
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 , people who are producing
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missiles
 do not reckon about
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. Recently , Vladimir Putin who is the president of
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Russia
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Russian
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 Federation has given his opinion about it . It sounds like "The relationship among countries
are
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crucial
crusial
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crucial
, as they don't support each other". To conclude,
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there are global issues
in
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 our planet with promotion and cooperation , the majority of
problems
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 could be tackled
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