In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

In the ever-changing world, it is noticed when choosing a destination for their vacation, an inclination of people towards their
home
country
is observed as compared to other parts of the globe.
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essay disagrees that
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the mass population prefers their
home
town over abroad when choosing to travel for leisure.
First
and foremost, we humans always like to experience new places,
hence
, visiting our
home
country
makes it boring.
Secondly
, visiting your
home
country
becomes strenuous as you get entangled
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numerous commitments with family and friends which
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effects
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your well-being.
For instance
, Elon Morgan stated in his interview with CNN "Australia which is my
home
country
would be my
last
choice to travel for a break, as I don't want to indulge in the renovation and fixing of my house and forget that my main purpose of taking off
wis
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was
to enjoy and take rest".
Although
the cost of travelling is surging
now a days
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which makes it economical for the person to travel to his
home
country
, the purpose of taking holidays is not to save money, it is ultimately to please and refresh yourself. The person always
find
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it mesmerizing when
visiting
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new places as it gives them a sense of relaxation.
For instance
, a study
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the University of Chicago depicts that the lion's share of people taking off from work in
US
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the US
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is divided into
following
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preference: 63% takes a flight to
middle
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east region to enjoy hot weather; 28% prefers Europe to explore historical sights
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only 9% staffs prefer to visit their forefather place. In a nutshell, the future does
predicts
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that the cost of living will amplify in the coming days, but choosing your
home
country
for holidays will never be the
first
choice of a person, as
traveling
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abroad is always found to be enticing.
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