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In many countries today, crimes novels and TV crimes dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV show are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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Crime
 fiction and television
series
 are garnering worldwide popularity. People are hooked
to
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crime
content
 because they have an element of surprise and twist;
however
, I feel that
crime
 fiction and TV drama disturb the mind and should be avoided. Books and television
series
 of the
crime
 genre
have
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 become an addictive
choice
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choices
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 for the masses. Entertainment providers or book authors ensure that they fill their
content
 with surprises,
speed
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 action, and unexpected twists in the story.
This
 keeps the audience engaged and wanting for the
next
 episode of the
series
 or the
next
 book.
Also
, deep down the entertainment industry understands the psychology of
human
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the human
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 mind which always seeks novelty / suspense.
For example
, the Game of
Throne
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Thrones
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series
 has become very popular amongst old and young because of its strong characters and unexpected twists in the plot.
This
 popularity of
crime
 fiction, in my opinion, is detrimental to the readers or audience. People spend endless hours consuming
crime
content
 through reading or watching
series
, but in the
end
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 their mind is left with disturbing images, and an addiction to
dopamine
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the dopamine
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 rush that
this
content
 brings. Especially for
kids
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 it is very very harmful
content
 which can lead to wrong choices early in life. To illustrate, a study published by Stanford psychological department states that because of
crime
 books and TV
content
 kids are exposed to at least 180 murder scenes by the age of sixteen. In conclusion,
although
the
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crime
 books and TV episodes are gaining huge entertainment popularity in recent times, I think
this
content
 should be avoided as much as possible and children must certainly stay away from it.
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