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In many workplace , online communication is no more convenient than face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages.

#workplace #communication #face #meetings #trend
These days digital communication has become increasingly prevalent in companies compared to
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in person
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 conversation rapid technological progress.
Although
 I think that it can lead to some obvious negative consequences I believe that the advantages of
this
 trend can outweigh the disadvantage tages . On the one hand,
meetings
 online would not cause great interpersonal relationships compared with
person
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meetings
, people would share and discuss concerning topics and bond with each other.
Moreover
, they may even go to
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work
dinner
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 where they will talk about their work
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problems
problams
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, have fun and have a good time,
thus
 strengthening their interpersonal relationship.
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Research
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,
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has found that 50% of employees do not feel close to their workers when they are working from home or from online.
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largely
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 because they do not communicate
each
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 other.
As a
result
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 online communication
do
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 not cultivate our interpersonal skills.
On the other hand
, my view is that working online is less
time consuming
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 and convenient because it is easily accessible from any place
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 world.
For instance
, my brother is working in
Singapure
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Singapore
. But he leaves in America
the
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can do
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meetings
 online concerning projects in Singapore without physically coming to Singapore.
Furthermore
, if a person is working online, he will save transportation with their
families
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 as people have to work from home and do not need to
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communicate
communite
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communicate
 during peak hours .
As a result
 consequences due to the many advantages of online
meetings
 , the disadvantages are left behind. In conclusion,
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although
alhough
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although
 online communication has drawbacks regarding interpersonal relationships , I believe that the
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prefer
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outweigh
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 the cans because not only does it save money but
also
 it is convenient and time-saving.
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