In many countries paying for things using mobile phones( cellphones) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disatvantages?

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benefits of
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method is one of the most common and important
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which is, not only, becoming increasingly common but
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has its own drawbacks
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would highlight both aspects of the topic and gives reasons
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my inclination towards the advantages of online
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. To commence with, since covid shopping online has become a norm as the general public was afraid of catching the virus
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not going to shopping malls.
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, online
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took a boost and
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many advantages
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, paying online using mobile phones has made
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people
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people
lives easier in terms of standing in long
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at the shopping centre.
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, many
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and brands now have an online discount or coupon system which is specifically for shopping online,
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, people generally admire
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gesture.
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, many people who are living abroad and away from their homeland but wish to buy local
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products
prducts
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products
in terms of clothing or household items can easily
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the online
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method to fulfil their desires.
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live in Kuwait and like to wear my traditional Pakistani dresses,
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use
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the
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online
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applications
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like PayTM and Paypal which are not even safe but
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quite easy to
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and efficient. It is rightly said that there are two sides
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every picture,
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these phone
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have
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various
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drawbacks as well,
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, if we are not using a safe website or we
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do not
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paying online, our data can easily be leaked and
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misused by someone.
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, we need a good quality internet speed for online payments because if the internet connection gets disrupted
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could be charged twice and is sometimes not refundable.
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loose
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security
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and
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passcodes
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our information. In a nutshell,
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would like to conclude that,
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online
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many disadvantages in terms of
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personal information,
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issue can be
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resolved
if we
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proper and authentic
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for
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methods
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see it online
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methods
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more advantages leading to a
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hassle free
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life with the benefit of sitting in the confines of your home and enjoying shopping.
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