Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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A large number of
children
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devote lots of their
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their high-tech cell
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every day. I think they
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, since they do not have appropriate activities to
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their spare
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and
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, as they are alone.
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, I believe that definitely it is a negative development. These days. We
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witness
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the
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significant number of nuclear families, who have only one child and due to the economic
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of the majority of society, both parents have to work full-
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. To illustrate, imagine an 8-year-old boy, who does have any sisters or brothers; he comes back home from school and there is no one at home.
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, he uses his phone to communicate with other individuals, his relatives or friends.
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, the limited space of the apartment,
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him to do some games on his phone,
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of doing some activities which need more space like playing with a ball.
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,
children
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use
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their high-tech gadgets for various reasons, like solitary and limited space. On the other side of the coin, spending a significant
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on
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modern cell
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, have several negative consequences.
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,
children
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sit or lay down and
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their mobile
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, according to the common poor nutrition diet of the
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, with
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passive lifestyle,
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has negative effects on their health and may cause obesity in some cases.
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, they
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to spend their
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on their gadgets and do not talk to their parents or other
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.
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lack of communication, will
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negative impacts on their social skills. And
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, parents do not have any control
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the contents that their
children
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see
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their
phones
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. In some age
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category
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it can be harmful
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the
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children
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,
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since social media is full of violence or sexual content, which a little kid should face at its true
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. In conclusion, I believe that
children
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use
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their smartphones more and more
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since they do not have enough people around them to spend their
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with them and
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they live in small apartments, which cannot do some physical activities there.
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phenomenon has various negative impacts on the
children
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,
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as health problems, lack of social skills and
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inappropriate
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of inappropriate
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content.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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