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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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According to the prompt, Due to the development, transport facilities
such
 as cars and trams will be automated; only commuters would be travelling inside the vehicles. I mostly agree with
this
 statement following two reasons that are given in below. On the one hand,
driverless
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vehicle
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 may help to reduce the number of
car
 accidents which is due to human errors because some people do not obey the traffic law. Apart from
this
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driverless
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 for old age and
disability
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 people, who can travel safer. Another advantage of automation,
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would be saving
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time
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 busy
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 activities.
Driverless
 cars and trams would more safety as compared with
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drive
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for example
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 when some
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 take
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 during
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travel, they are unconscious.
In addition
,
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 react quickly when any obstacle ahead and something
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 passed careless passengers and animals.
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, some demerits will happen
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driverless
 vehicles.
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 vehicle is more expensive and
also
 require lots of maintenance
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annual
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 that shows as annoying and expensive. Sometimes, software and technical problems happen in
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 and sometimes, when vehicles are out of electricity
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is
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 cause
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delay
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 trip and users wait until it will not
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 charged. Another con is unemployment because when
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 would more in future the reduced amount of
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 in
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 and
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loss
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 job so
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 causes unemployment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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