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many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. to what extent do you agree or disagree

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A good job to get is a dream for every student when he/she graduates, some are lucky enough to secure it while others struggle for that. A huge number of people say that securing a good job is promised by a course of
university
 education. I believe that it's not just about a degree or
university
 qualification but it
also
 depends upon some practical
knowledge
. On the one hand, a
university
 or high school education is essential to get a good job, but guaranteeing a sophisticated career would not be appropriate to claim. Because a college or
university
 course is only based on theoretical education with a little combination of practical awareness, which will not be enough to help a graduate reach the top very soon.
For example
, I am an aeronautical engineer graduate, but that course will not promise me a post in top companies,
such
 as Nasa, Boeing, or airbus. But I have to gain some experience to work in those companies. Whereas,
on the other hand
, practical ability along with a few years of experience can lead graduate students to some top-class companies and help them achieve their dream jobs.
For instance
, a hospital will not risk its reputation to hire a surgeon with no practical skills, which can affect the image of a hospital in public, while the same hospital will prefer to hire a surgeon with 2 to 3 years of experience because they can understand that he can perform better in surgeries with the help of his practical
knowledge
. In conclusion, I believe that not just a college or a
university
 degree can guarantee a post because it is based on theoretical
knowledge
.
Although
 theoretical
knowledge
 is mandatory too, practical
knowledge
 is preferable in nowadays world.
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