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Teleworking has been on the increase in recent years. Do you think this is a negative or postive development ?

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 option of remote working has significantly increased. While some believe that it has greater advantages while others argue that it has many side effects. In
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, Teleworking avoids
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unnecessary
unncessary
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unnecessary
wastage
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 of
times
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 and enables
to
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 focus more on core
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productivity
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. To clarify, situations during
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pandemic
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pandamic
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 proved that productivity in most
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organisations
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organsiations
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organisations
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significantly
signifcantly
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significantly
 increased due to forced remote working policies.
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, IT Employees and sales
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professional
professionsl
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professionals
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 able to focus more on
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their
the
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their
delivarables
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deliverables
 and targets rather than wasting time
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the office
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.
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, an
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attemps
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attempt
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reinstantiate
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re-instantiate
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 remote work to regular office patterns has resulted in decreased productivity and increased attrition rates. Remote working concepts
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facilitates
faciliates
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facilitate
 Increased prospects of job and hiring opportunities for both job seekers and organisations.
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,
this
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otherwise
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difficlut
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difficult
 to hire locally for employers and
and
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to
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them to
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 work for dream companies by its aspirants without relocating from
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their
thier
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their
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, Professional sectors
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Engineering
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 are encouraging
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candidates to work remotely to attract better talents globally.
As a
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result
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this
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 situation for both employers and employees. To Conclude, I am
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 supporter of
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organisations
organsiations
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organisations
 promoting remote
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 considering its great number of advantages
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 as better
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opportunities
opprtunities
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opportunities
, increased productivity etc,
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, an exception should be made for special profiles which
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 physical presence
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is
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 important and no viable remote
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work
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 alternatives.
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