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Some universities deduct students’ marks if work is given late. What is your opinion and recommend some alternative actions for this problem?

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Nowadays some educational institutions use a method which is deducting
students
'
marks
 due to some reasons
such
 as giving their work late, While
this
 method could be active in many cases, and I partly agree with
this
 view but there are many factors
should
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 I am going to illustrate the alternatives and solutions
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this
 problem
Firstly
, it is
logic
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 and true that all
students
 should give their
works
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work
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 and sheets
in
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the
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time
, they already have a schedule to go with, each subject they study has a timetable, beginning and ending.
Secondly
, the criteria of discipline and
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students
'
marks
 if their work is given late is active to urge
students
 to respect
time
 and
studying
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the studying
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 process
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overall
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over all
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.
Finally
,
marks
 shouldn't be high or take a big part
of
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students
'
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evaluation
evalution
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evaluation
.
Furthermore
, the top
students
 will restrict
with
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 the timetable to have these
marks
 to achieve the full mark.
Moreover
, the others will try to get any
marks
 to help them pass the exams.
On the other hand
, some would argue that the
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universities
universites
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universities
 should excuse their
students
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especially
especailly
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especially
 those who have
a
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true
reasons
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reason
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 for giving their
works
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work
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 late, I recommend some alternatives for
this
 issue, we may replace
this
 method in some subjects which are already hard in studying, because these might take a long
time
 in teaching more than others,
as a
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 they would have enough
time
 to get their works done.
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 solution could
be consider
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students
' excuses for being late and
giving
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 them
second
 chance for those who have
an
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excellent
exellent
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marks
. In conclusion, deducting student
marks
 have both positive and negative side, but overall, it is an active way and it has proven successful before
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