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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Societies set
rules
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 for everyone that they expect
people
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 to follow and obey. Sometimes, these policies could be written
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 paper and other times, these
rules
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 could be expectations of
people
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, not necessarily written. From my point of view, these
rules
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 are becoming less rigid for the young population, giving them more freedom than before. I feel
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 way for two reasons that I will explain in detail below. The
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 point I would like to make is that, nowadays, more
people
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, especially
parents
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, tend to accept younger generations' decisions. We see that many
parents
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 have changed their authority mindset for one more flexible.
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, in my country, one of the
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 that society expected for young generations was to search for economic stability straight away after university. Nowadays, when university students end their major, many of them prefer to travel and take time for self-development rather than work.
Parents
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 still find
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 decision as not good for their children but they let them take their own choices. The
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 thought I would like to point out is that job
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 have changed due to the
pandemic
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, Covid19.
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 has had an
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 impact on entry-level roles, that are built for young
people
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.
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, before the
pandemic
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, it was a dream to think about remote work. The majority of the companies had strict policies about the starting hour of work and about going every day to the office.
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, after the
pandemic
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, we have seen a shift in these
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. Now, many enterprises are opting for giving flexibility to their workers, especially entry-level.
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, many of these
people
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 can decide whether to go to an office or stay at home. In conclusion, I don't think that young
people
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 need to follow and obey strict
rules
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. In fact, I believe that
rules
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 for the young population have become more flexible over the years. As I mentioned before,
parents
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 are giving their more freedom their children to take their decisions.
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, the
pandemic
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 has brought more working flexibility for young generations.
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