1. In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals as food or other products, such as medicines and clothing. Do you agree or disagree?
These days, we are faced with many public health challenges regarding poor health conditions, including cancer and heart disease, caused by excessive consumption of meat on a regular and long-term basis. (1) Experts are calling for a change in human diets so that people can enjoy better health. Fortunately, many alternative meat products are available on the market. In fact, vegetarian diets are being
favored
by a growing number of people and can provide the same amount of nutrients for consumers. Change the spelling
favoured
In particular
, mushrooms and tofu contain high levels of protein, a kind of nutrient presumably only found in meat, and can therefore
be used as a substitute. (2) Furthermore
, medical experiments on animals
and medicines manufactured from animals
’ body parts received little endorsement in the past. Nowadays, herbs and many other types of plant-based medicines, such
as ginseng, can cure many diseases, prolong human life expectancy, and aid medical practitioners in the treatment of many illnesses. More seriously, thousands of wild animals
, such
as tigers and minks, are killed each year, with their fur taken to produce coats and accessories for the fashion industry. (3) There are now similar products made from plants and artificial materials that can fulfill
our needs. Change the spelling
fulfil
Animals
do not have to suffer for our needs anymore. In conclusion, I think that our needs and desires do not justify the suffering of animals
and animal products are no longer necessary. We can choose a different source of nourishment, medicine and clothing without any toll on wild animals
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite