Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development? Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their studies. Provide reasons why they are more successful and what are the requirements for success?

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more than one small glass of fruit juice a day. Health experts issued the warning

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largest source. Adults derived a lower

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of their overall calorie intake with sugar, but consumption was still too high in all age groups. The experts

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to one 150ml glass a day, drunk with a meal, to reduce the risk of tooth decay. ‘Those best

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are water and low-fat milk,’ told Alison Tedstone, PHE’s chief nutritionist.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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