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Football
 has a long and interesting history. The was
first
 played in England as early as 1170.
However
, aspects of the game
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 traced back to the
second
 and
third
 century BC in China. Military manuals from the time describe an exercise called Tsu’ Chu, in
opponents
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 played with
leather
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ball
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 filled with feathers and hair. Variations of
football
 are
also
 documented in Egyptian and Greek society, proving that the sport
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long tradition. the popularity of
football
 continued to increase in England, the games were often violent with sometimes up
one
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 thousand people playing
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 one time. In 1848, rules were written
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 game, which still
exist
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 today. Women have been involved in the game
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 late nineteenth century, and in 1971 the English Women’s
Football
 Association was formed.
Football
 has certainly come a long way from its humble beginnings many hundreds of years ago.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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