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Some people think learning painting and drawing at school is a waste of time while others think it is important. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 think learning
art
,
such
 as painting and drawing at school is a waste of time while others think it is important. In my opinion, learning
art
 at school gives
people
 have good imagination which is one of the important parts of success in the future.
Therefore
this
 is a significant subject at school.
To begin
 with, researchers said that most of the successful have developed
brain
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 which
is
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utilize both left and right brains. At
first
, we have known that have left
brain
 controls logic and the right
brain
 controls the imagination. And students who are good at math or physic or some logical subject always have their left
brain
 developed and vice versa, students who have a right
brain
 developed
always
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 good at
art
 or creative subjects.
However
, using both sizes of brains can help them easier to memorize
.
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more.
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For example
: most
of
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memorable
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people
 in the world, who can remember a long number in seconds said that they imagine a story in their head and can remember
better
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it better
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.
Second
, learning painting and drawing help students improve the flexibility of their hand and knowing about
art
 help them enjoy beautification and make their lives happier.
Finally
, even though many
people
 have different
opinion
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, I believe that understanding
art
 makes
people
 more civilized, and peace-loving thereby our lives will be happier.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-expression
  • creativity
  • problem-solving
  • critical thinking
  • cultural literacy
  • historical awareness
  • therapeutic
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