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Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, an increasing number of
parents
 are concerned about their
children
's education and try to protect their kids from making
mistakes
.
However
, whether
parents
 should prevent
children
 from making
mistakes
 or give them the freedom to make
mistakes
 becomes a hot topic. My view is that
parents
 should give
children
 enough space so they can try something that they want. It is obvious that
children
 can benefit from
mistakes
 and learn the correct way to resolve them. If
parents
 always prevent
children
 from making
mistakes
, they cannot obtain the ability to face and solve problems.
Parents
 must allow them their make
mistakes
.
However
, guiding
children
 is better than preventing them, and overprotecting
children
 can stifle their nature and creativity.
For example
, my
parents
 always let me try something new and encouraged me to learn from my
mistakes
. When I am failed at something, they always give me some advice rather than prevent me from doing it, and I can learn how to face my
mistakes
 and resolve them. Giving
children
 complete freedom is not a good way. Some unacceptable
mistakes
 can undermine
children
's lives,
for instance
, dragging, stealing, and something like that. Keeping
children
 away from those things is necessary for
parents
.
Nevertheless
,
parents
 cannot prevent kids from the things which could contain potential risks.
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