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Medical professionals such as doctors or nurses from poorer countries often migrate to richer countries to work. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

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There is a tendency, nowadays, that professionals from poorer
countries
 tend to
imigrate
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emigrate
migrate
immigrate
 to richer
countries
 to
work
.
Thus
, it leads to
problems
 either in left
and
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 moved
countries
. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will discuss these
problems
 and propose possible solutions regarding
to
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the issue.
Firstly
, a
leak
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lack
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 of educated
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professionals
proffesionals
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professionals
 in poor
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countries
countrie
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countries
 puts the
countries
 in
the
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a
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 situation
when
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where
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 there is a lack of
such
 masters. I think that it would be even harder to become
more
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 developed country if the members of the public left their
countries
 for
better
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 life.
Furthermore
, people who do not have an opportunity to leave the country have
stay
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 and receive worse quality service throughout the country because of
such
 professionals who left.
For example
, the medical system in Kazakhstan suffers from
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insufficient
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unsufficient
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insufficient
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 quality and bad conditions for doctors and nurses;
as a result
 of
this
,
such
 doctors try to move to richer
countries
 with better
work
 conditions.
The
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 possible solution is to encourage people to stay by increasing their
salary
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salaries
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 and giving them more options for
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growth
grouth
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growth
.
Secondly
, the
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increase
increse
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increase
 of professionals in rich
countries
, in turn, could lead to
unbalanced
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work
 market. It means that due to a big number of good quality
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employees
emploees
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employees
, it would be harder for natives to find a job.
For instance
, a lot of people want to
work
 in the USA,
therefore
, workers from all over the world compete with each other in order to get a better job.
Consequently
, it drops the
changes
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chances
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 for
americans
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Americans
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 to get
same
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work
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position
possition
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position
. I think that local
authority
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authorities
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 should focus on
this
 issue and allow their citizens to compete only with each other and not with foreign
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employees
empoyees
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employees
. Sum upping the whole that has been
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 before, I would say that there are at least two big issues related to
this
work
 migration:
problems
 for left counties and
problems
 with
unbalanced
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work
 market.
However
,
work
 stimulation in poor
countries
 as well as extra positions for natives could solve these
problems
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Healthcare sector
  • Workload
  • Cultural barriers
  • Economic implications
  • Quality of care
  • Mortality rates
  • Incentivize
  • Remuneration
  • International agreements
  • Infrastructure
  • Underserved areas
  • Exchange programs
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