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Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together ia a beneficial way.

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There is no doubt that social
media
 sources are having more influence on
people
's lives nowadays. There are different points of view on
this
 topic. Some users suppose that Facebook or Twitter are causing
troubles
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trouble
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 for
younger
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the younger
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 generation making them unable to create social connections.
However
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 others state that social networks help
people
 to unite. According to some opinions, there are some dangerous impacts on young
people
. Watching famous
people
 through the screen makes the wrong vision which is not true in most cases. Toxic productivity shown in social
media
 makes youngsters feel frustrated and less self-confident. It might cause some troubles with mental health, which affects
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real-life
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real life
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 relationships and forming new communications.
However
, there is a different point of view. Contrarians of the
first
 group state that social
media
 unites
people
 through their interests in a positive way. There are lots of communities in social networks that are divided into themes. Some participants can
also
 manage festivals or meetings and help
people
 to find their mates. Some of the participants can even become friends in real life through these events. To put it in a nutshell, social
media
 has undoubtedly
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lots
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 of impacts on
young
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the young
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 generation. Some of them might be distractive and even dangerous for
every day
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 life,
however
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 others help
people
 to get acquainted and create new relationships, which means
to become
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 more socially active. It seems that internet communities divided into fields of
interests
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interest
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 are bringing much more benefits for
people
 than disadvantages caused by the
media
.

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