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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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work.In my
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individuals
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 the governments must support them with
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 and find
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since there have valid reasons.
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 there are other people who would argue that working abroad is developing for hands one.
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.Another reason to go to foreign countries
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individual's
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workplace
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 in their
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 the residents are
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 living own
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career
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 and government must provide
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well-paid
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the well-paid
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 for all inhabitants.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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