Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is undisputed that physical health is very important but it is investigated that it is proven by
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that if you don't have mental health, your surrender may be affected. All of
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because when you look at a vulnerable position, your mental state decreases
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makes you unable to concentrate and your memory is
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of that don't retain information. Despite
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It is necessary having a good quality of life, since researchers claim that with a good exercise routine,
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of life is less likely to suffer from mental problems. For that
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think it's a vicious circle, where one depends on the other, yet I think the most important thing is mental health so that we can get through.
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it is understandable that a lot of people
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prefer doing exercise to calm
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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