Reporting of crimes and other kinds of violent news on television and in newspapers can have adverse consquences. This kind of information should be restricted from being shown in the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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crimes and other kinds
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shown
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television and
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. The question is, what do you think about the crimes shown
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television is a dangerous for
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teenagers and kids? In the essay,I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of problems, I think it is dangerous for all
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ages because the child doesn’t know and maybe
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to try what they see. The main reason given to
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children
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all the time watch the television or newspapers so they some games
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the computer or mobile phone it is more dangerous for how they think or learn the kid something bad
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must be watched the teenagers and
children
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all the time what they play or watch,To illustrate, should the news only take about the crime and
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show the photos or videos in the media and newspapers and the adults need to see they
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phone and talk with him to learn our
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about the peace.
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you the news and
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scare them, Teach them to forgive. In conclusion,
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learning is the important thing focus
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the
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peace and exercise
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let them watch
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horror movies
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believe that always make conversation with teenagers and
children
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stay close and make them comfortable and tell their
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about friendship and forgiveness , try to learn they something new, so the crimes and other kinds
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so dangerous about how they think we need to stop showing
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thing even horror films.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • apathetic
  • heightened sense
  • anxiety
  • restricting
  • panic
  • rumor spreading
  • censoring
  • infringe
  • freedom of the press
  • informed public
  • precautions
  • policies
  • balance
  • broadcasting
  • sensitive content
  • exposure level
  • educational content
  • constructive approach
  • societal issue
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