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Countries are becoming more and more similliar because are able to by the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The pie charts illustrated the percentages of a variety of ways of finding out the news by Canadians and Australians. 
Overall, both nations showed similar proportions. The major ways to access the news were television and online, whereas others,
such
 as radio, print and those not specified made up lower segments.

 In Canada, accessing information by watching TV contributed to the largest proportion at two-fifths, followed by online, which was 4% less than
first
 place.
However
, The ranking in Australia was the opposite. The segment of using online took the lead at more than half per cent (52%), which saw the greatest difference in Canadians, at 16% apart.
Next
 came TV users, at 37%. The proportion of print that find the information was ranked
third
 in both Canada and Australia, at 14% and 7%, respectively. It is worth noting that Australians listening to the radio were at only 2%, whereas the percentage in Canada was over three times the number in Australia.
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