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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and joining universities. What are the advantages or disadvantages?

#year #school #universities
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Nowadays ,
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the selection
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 of
career
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 plays
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 pivotal role in student life , so correct
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,  getting
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 to research 
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the
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 details.
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 ,
students
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 get a chance to know themselves ,
there
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their
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choices
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their preferences
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aforementioned
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 is  leisure
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 to gain
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 about the field they want to join ,
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know the scope of the course .
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,  the gap between schooling and university plays a crucial role as
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 break
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 period
students
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 can grasp
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 about the department
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in which
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 they want to pursue
there
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career
carrer
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career
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Also
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 it is very popular in various nations where there is
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 off a year between schooling and college, the major reason behind it is to study
there
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skills
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 and
knowledge
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 and to select the perfect
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 for forward studies . For an instance, as per
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 survey
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bbc
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BBC
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 says 80% of growing youth are taking a break after
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 school education before joining colleges
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,  another advantage is
students
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 get a chance to know themselves
there
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choices
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 and preferences , top
skills
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 in various activities.
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, get a chance to explore themselves, 
see
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 the current scenario of the various field . Get an idea of
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skills
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where
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 they want to study.
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 period they
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skills
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 they earn money from
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part-time
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part
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time
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job
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jobs
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 to
fulfill
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there
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 basic needs and save for
there
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further
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 education. For
an
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example, working experience
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 are more productive than
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students
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 article. To conclude,  due to the discussed point
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 essay has shown the advantages as well as
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the importance
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 of a gap between school education  and universities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal growth
  • academic performance
  • career exploration
  • cultural exposure
  • academic momentum
  • financial implications
  • peer separation
  • higher education
  • maturity
  • independence
  • self-understanding
  • reinvigorate
  • career paths
  • internships
  • globalized
  • structured learning
  • study habits
  • earning potential
  • social integration
  • non-academic
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