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One of the biggest environmental problems we have is global warming. What can government do to address this problem? What can individual people do?

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Global warming is one of the most serious problems in today's world. The environmental issue has
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government
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the government
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,
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This
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this
problem
 and how governments and societies can be tackled
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this
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Nowadays
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Nowadays
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, the
government
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states
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states
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 may try to change any
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consumption
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 like fossil fuel. In 2021,
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the UK establish a national conference to consult
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 huge
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 in the
worlds
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 like global warming.
In addition
, all the
government
 representations might deal to solve the
problem
 in order to reduce the pollution and carbon footprint in the atmosphere.
For instance
, industrial
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 have risen
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air pollution and gases
such
 as co2 and Methane
that is
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the resident which can
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cause asthma diseases. To solve
this
problem
, the governments must transfer the factories
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out of
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 city.
Also
, they should force a financial penalty
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 companies
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 pollute the earth's atmosphere.
As a result
, global warming might be disappeared if the
government
 solve
this
problem
 industriously.
Also
, Most
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people
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the people
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 have
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to increase
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pollution. The manner of
people
 in their life
such
 as
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using
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 car's when they go to work or other places that not
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solve
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the problem
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problem
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problems
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.
Furthermore
,
such
 as awful habits ignite the wood, grasses and plastic in a huge forest that cause global warming as a good example
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this
,
in
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 Masdar city in UAE,
people
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the
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clen
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clean
 energy in their
home
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homes
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 with an electronic car
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 is a good instance
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 environmentally friendly.
Therefore
,
People
 must encourage
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other
people
 to use biodegradable elements, public transport and solar energy in their hoses
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 will be an immaculate world. In conclusion, the
government
 and individual
people
 should be cooperative to conserve the land and the sky from high
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temperatures
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. If that
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 occur all the
creature
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 on the earth will
can
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suffer from global warming.
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