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Some schools start teaching a foreign language in primary school years. Do the advantages of teaching foreign languages to young children outweigh its disadvantages?

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At present, learning a new
language
 can not be challenging and so many people find
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the
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 easy way to learn
the
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apply
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foreign
languages
. So
that
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primary schools are starting to teach their tutors to use
the
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foreign
languages
. And
i
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 think that have more advantage than disadvantage. It is can be seen that parents nowadays care very much about their
children
's study career and the thing they care about most is foreign
language
 so that their
children
 need to be learned very soon. That can lead to loneliness in
children
 who do not have perfect childhood memories. And
the
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foreign
languages
is
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 quite hard for
children
 in primary school
whom
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who
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 just start to learn their mother
language
 and two
languages
 can be mixed so that they can not learn both of them. But
on the other
hand
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 when that
children
 learn
the
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second
language
 soon they can update their brains and that brain might be evaluated. The foreign
language
 can help
children
 read and learn new knowledge which is not in any textbooks written by
vietnamese
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 that can lead to the success of
children
 in the future. To conclude, starting learning early can
be break
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 our
children
's childhood but we can do everything for the success of our kids.
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