Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Health awareness had drastically increased over the years.

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,

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realisation has come with the alarming surge of diseases. While many

people

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they should be responsible for their own health others believes it is the

government

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duty to do it. In the following

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I will discuss both of the views and explain with good

rational

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behind

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them

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.

Firstly

every individual has free will and they should not be forced to do anything. Requirements

of

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the healthier

life-style

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lifestyle

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can not be suitable for everyone because

it

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may be too hard to apply.

For

example

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choosing not to smoke might be great for

lungs

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but some

people

prefer

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enjoy the moment rather than long-term health benefits. Since society members are free to do anything, nothing should be forced upon them.

On the other hand

,

government

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the government

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can promote healthier living. Authorities

has

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the power

of

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augment

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peoples’ behaviour

such

as

provide

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free gym memberships,

build

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pools for folks or

prepare

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organic food for schoolchildren. With

this

kind of

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action

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actions

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people

will be more encouraged to choose the right option for their good. To sum up, I believe each person’s life and decisions

ultimately

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in their own control,

on the contrary

governments might

enacts

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laws and offer benefits to the populace to encourage

people

act

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to better. I think both of them need to play

equal

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the equal

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part

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of

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themselves and society.