Some people think that the internet has brought people together while others think that people have become more isolated now.” Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Both groups of
people
are right in their thoughts about the
Internet
. Thanks to the network, we can communicate with anyone, whenever we want, from anywhere in the world. The
Internet
also
makes it relatively easy to study the cultures of other peoples, thanks to which many
people
know, and some even understand, how the life of other
people
from other cultures works, and
this
really unites them in some way. But at the same time, many
people
are becoming too dependent on the
Internet
and less and less often communicate in person and not through messages and emails. If
people
do not communicate with their friends live,
meet
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their friends in the real world, sooner or later they will not have friends and those who are used to communicating only through the network will remain isolated and lonely. The
Internet
gives
people
great opportunities
in
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communication and socialization, but
this
very socialization should not be limited to the
Internet
alone. On the
Internet
, it's easy to pretend to be someone you really aren't, but that's not the best idea, because once you meet one of your "pen pals" they will immediately realize that you are not
who
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you want to appear to be and lied to them all that the time that he communicated with them, very few
people
will understand
this
and forgive and most likely after
such
a "discovery" they will not want to communicate with
such
a person anymore, which will
also
make him lonely and somewhat isolated.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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