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In some countries, more young adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In some nations, an increasing number of young
people
 continue to live with their
parents
 until they graduated and get a job.
While
 there are a number of benefits of
this
 trend, I am of the opinion that the drawbacks are greater. On the one hand,
this
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 can be highly beneficial for many reasons. One of the key advantages is that it helps youngsters
do
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not
worry
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to worry
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 about
expenses
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the expenses
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 of living standard.
For example
, they do not pay for
renting
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,
food
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or food
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 when they live with their
parents
.
As a result
, they prefer living with lovers to
live
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 far from their
family
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families
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. Another
significant
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 is that young
people
 could spend more time
to
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with
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 their
parents
. It is because they have time to take care of their lovers and create many memories together.
Consequently
,they get
interseting
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interesting
 things and make their life better.
On the other hand
, I would argue that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
Fistly
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Firstly
,youngsters would not be independent. The reason is that
,
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 they could depend on others and do not want to do anything by themselves.
For instance
,After class ,their
parents
prepares
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 meals already and
helps
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 them do housework.
This
 can lead to
negative
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the negative
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thing
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things
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 that
they
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apply
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would be more
pasive
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passive
positive
.
Secondly
, when living with
parents
, young
people
 would be limited
their
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 effort. It is because they do not bear the
responsibile
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responsibility
 for expenses so they do not want to earn money and create
to across
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difficulties in life.
Finally
,
this
 trend might affect
on
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their career.It is because,young adults do not enhance necessary
skill
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skills
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 like pressure work,
the
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 importance of
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a relationship
the relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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 with others so they could face hindrances in their career path. In conclusion, despite several benefits
that
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young
people
 continue living with their
parents
 after
graduate
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 and finding jobs. It
seem
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 to me that the drawbacks are weightier than
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the advantanges
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advantanges
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advantages
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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