Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, the topic of healthy life is being brought up daily. Many
people
ask themselves: who is responsible for all of
this
? Are we
ourselves
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responsible for our personal
health
? Is the
government
responsible for our personal
health
? It is obvious to say that different
people
have different opinions. Despite those opinions, in my
opinion
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after looking at the factors, every individual is responsible for their own
health
. To start with, each individual knows their body way better than the
government
knows it.
Thus
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, the individual is able to decide when they feel it's best to go to the
doctors
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,
or
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when it's best to work out or when it's best to stop doing sports and so on.
This
shows that the person themselves, have the full responsibility
of
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their own healthy
lifestyle
and matter of fact, any
lifestyle
they want to follow. As mentioned before,
people
also
tend to think that the
government
has a say in a person's
lifestyle
. As mentioned above,
people
are
also
inclined to believe that the
government
is
also
responsible for a person’s
health
and healthy
lifestyle
. Overall,
that is
not completely inaccurate but the individual has more responsibility. The reason the
government
is
also
responsible for the healthy
lifestyle
of a human
being
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is that they are the ones who provide the hospitals, the ambulances, the
health
insurance and all of that. All in all, after looking at all the factors, every individual is responsible for their own healthy
lifestyle
but the
government
themselves, are responsible for providing an efficient and
well working
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health
service.
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