Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, the topic of healthy life is being brought up daily. Many

people

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ask themselves: who is responsible for all of

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? Are we

ourselves

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responsible for our personal

health

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? Is the

government

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responsible for our personal

health

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? It is obvious to say that different

people

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have different opinions. Despite those opinions, in my

opinion

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after looking at the factors, every individual is responsible for their own

health

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. To start with, each individual knows their body way better than the

government

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knows it.

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Thus

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meaning

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, the individual is able to decide when they feel it's best to go to the

doctors

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doctor

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when it's best to work out or when it's best to stop doing sports and so on.

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shows that the person themselves, have the full responsibility

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their own healthy

lifestyle

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and matter of fact, any

lifestyle

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they want to follow. As mentioned before,

people

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also

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tend to think that the

government

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has a say in a person's

lifestyle

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. As mentioned above,

people

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are

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inclined to believe that the

government

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also

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responsible for a person’s

health

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and healthy

lifestyle

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. Overall,

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not completely inaccurate but the individual has more responsibility. The reason the

government

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also

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responsible for the healthy

lifestyle

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of a human

being

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is that they are the ones who provide the hospitals, the ambulances, the

health

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insurance and all of that. All in all, after looking at all the factors, every individual is responsible for their own healthy

lifestyle

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but the

government

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themselves, are responsible for providing an efficient and

well working

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health

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service.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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4 paragraphs

263 words

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Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each orther. Others argue that people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

‏Nowadays environmental problems are too big to be managed by individual persons or individual countries. In other words, it is an international problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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