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Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that government should take care of it. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #lifestyle #government #care
The
Article
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article
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 talks about the fact that numerous
people
 believe that each person is responsible for their own
lifestyle
 and
wellbeing
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well-being
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, as well as that it's the responsibility of the
government
 to take care of
people
's health. On one
hand
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 it's our personal decision to stick to a healthy
lifestyle
 and no one can force us except ourselves. The main attitude to have a healthy
lifestyle
 is to set rules and really stick to them. Cutting fast food,
junk
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and junk
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 food and setting up an exercise plan for the week.
Furthermore
, nearly all of the streets with advertisements about
health
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healthy
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 food as well as on cigarette boxes,
it
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apply
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always says “Smoking Kills”, which tries to encourage
the
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people
 to quit smoking
On the other hand
, because the
government
 has the authority to pass laws and possesses all the power of a nation, it's
their
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its
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 responsibility to promote a healthy
lifestyle
. An effective strategy for getting more
people
 to exercise is to provide more additional public sporting venues. The only source of credit that might be used for
this
 action is the
government
.
Additionally
, unhealthy commercials like those for
McDonalds
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Mcdonald's
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 appear on TV today. I personally think that each and every person should be responsible for their own health, of
course
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 the
government
 can support them but at the end of the day
its
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it's
it is
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 our responsibility to look after ourselves.
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