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It has been more than 30 years since man landed on the moon. Some people think that space reaserch is a waste of money, especially when a large majority of people on earth are living in poverty. what are your views? Support with example .

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Technology made humans land on the moon 30 years ago. The amount spends on
space
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research
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 as compared to humanity's well-being is humongous. In my view, more focus and attention should be given to the people who are living in poverty on earth. Technology made everyone life's easier and
space
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Research
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 is another step which helps to achieve milestones of technology. As
space
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 is a wide subject and astronauts and satellites help scientists to explore more and more.
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, for all the matters related to
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 money is needed.
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, as per the latest
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 70% of the population of
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world is without basic necessities
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 shelter, food and education.
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 % is increasing every year due to inflation, economic instability and a lack of basic human needs. It is the responsibility of the government to provide all the facilities to the people.
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, of spending money on
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, priority should be given to humans and fulfilling their basic requirements and needs. Efforts should be made to help them to improve their living standard. In the end ,
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