Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn different cultures or to increase tension between people from different countries?

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Whether or not expanding tourism overseas is beneficial is a heated issue since contemporary transportation has materialized travel abroad for centuries. Some argue that
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activities serve as a catalyst to strengthen cultural communication in great depth,while others insist that the frequent interaction among nations
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the relationship between residents of different nationalities. I am strongly in favour of developing connections through globalization.
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of all, cultures are composed of languages, traditions and customs, all of which would cease to exist if the soil to disseminate it is sterile.
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to say, the inner circulation of a certain culture within a country is not adequate for preservation.
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, So isolated are some indigenous tribes in Amazon rainforests that residents from developed regions barely acquaint with them at all. Most members from
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ethnic groups have been struggling with survival, let alone handing over their unique cultures to young generations. In order to conserve their legacy passed down from ancestors, experts from all walks of life think up with various strategies
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as the creation of tourism attractions and
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of natives to perform in other places. Only in
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way could these tribes attain sufficient attention from the outside to assist them in
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of culture with funds and human resources.
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, I believe some fundamental standards of moral and upright conduct are shared among varying nations. Even though conservatives is accustomed to
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frequent global
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for disputes or confrontations, appearing to be unavoidable during
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contact between two countries, it is vital to provide opportunities to bridge the discrepancy. A key solution is to increase chances for people to get familiar with their counterparts via tourism.
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,a Japanese is likely to be considered as being rude by giving a bouquet of chrysanthemum as a gift in China since chrysanthemum is associated with death in Chinese culture.
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phenomenon of misunderstanding would be improved with the increasing mutual understanding of visitors. In conclusion, the expansion of international travel is a crucial component for mutual comprehension rather than intense conflicts arising
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countries.
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