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Some people think that the only purpose of work hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The diagrams illustrate the infrastructural changes that Meadowside
village
 and
Fonton
Correct your spelling
Font on
 underwent since 1962. Overall, Meadowside
village
 was partially developed in the year 1985, with the construction of a housing estate, leisure complex and superstore, while a road was built after 1965 which connected the
village
 with
Fonton
Correct your spelling
Font on
Fenton
.
In addition
 to that, a hotel, a station, and a business park were placed alongside the aforementioned road. As for the year 1985, well-developed roads were laid down, one stretching to Fondon and the other to the northward of Meadowside
village
, passing through the leisure complex.
Furthermore
, a housing estate and a superstore were constructed after 1962, adjacent to one of the roads. At present, a new railway track was developed after 1985, situated in the centre of the
village
 and
Fonton
Correct your spelling
Font on
Fenton
.
Furthermore
, a hotel and a business park were built on either side of the station.
Moreover
, the
village
, presently, is developed fully.
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