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Many countries believe international tourism has harmful effects. Why do they think so? What can be done to change their views?

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Not every country do approve that
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international
tourism
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 has a positive impact on their countries. There is a variety of reasons why they consider the negative influence on international
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.
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, we can take steps to change their views. On the one hand, international
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 is more likely to affect local environments.
Tourists
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 who do not have good manners may damage
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environment
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the environment
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.
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, some visitors from other countries believe
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that they
 who are far away from
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tourist attractions should leave their marks in those places. So relics are carved by these people.
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, sometimes
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 in order to
attracting
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 more
tourists
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all
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 over the world would destruct
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environment
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 to establish artificial scenic spots
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offer
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 as amusement parks,
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and theme
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 parks. Even though the behaviour
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 likely to help
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 to increase their revenue, the
environment
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 would be destroyed by no matter
tourists
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 or
governments
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.
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, in terms of international
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, perhaps
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 construct creative tourist
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attractions
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 for visitors’ tastes
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 of
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the original
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 local culture.
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 and
tourists
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 are able to take some measures to change some countries’ ideas.
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, the government should remind
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 to preserve
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environment
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 and arrange
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 to restrain and supervise visitors to destroy scenic spots.
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,
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 resources should be effectively developed, meanwhile
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 should protect original nature and culture.
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, announcing a decrease in
negative
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 influence on international
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, including maintaining nature, local
environment
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 and culture, would be better announced by social media or the press. In conclusion, there are a few reasons that some nations believe that international
tourism
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 has disadvantages. So whoever needs to do something to change that view.
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