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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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Traffic
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 congestion has been considered a detrimental factor in the destruction of many natural resources of the world. Governments all around the world, are dealing with
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 social issue in various ways. There are quite a large number of people who tend to
use
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 their own vehicles
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 of the public transportation
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. To explain more, private cars provide owners with some beneficial opportunities that incite them to commute even long distances by them. In fact, drivers can choose every route they want on the map to get to their destination,
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, it allows them to take detours whenever they want.
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, the infrastructure of many major cities is inadequate for the high volume of
traffic
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, so, more new routes and underpasses should be established to relieve the effects of
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 phenomenon.
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, encouraging individuals to
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 the public mode of transport would be an effective resolution to reduce the amount of
traffic
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. The same opening and closing times of all organizations in one community can lead to
traffic
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 congestion. For more explanation, when most of the shopping malls, stores, and educational
centers
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 open or close at the same time, it may cause a peak time for
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, whereas, the citizens tend to
use
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 their own cars at
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 time
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 of the public mode of transport. The public transportation
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 including trains or buses does not offer flexible routes which
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 many destinations are not available yet and it makes the journey more time-consuming. So,
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 people’s tendency to
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 the public transportation
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 is reduced and we have witnessed heavy
traffic
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, a well-established program for foundations’ activity could be effective,
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, providing more reliable and comfortable public transport systems could be efficient to increase its popularity. To conclude,
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 solving
traffic
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 issues need some specific programs in one society, constructing a well-equipped public transposition
system
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 that leads to an increased number of inhabitants using them, has been proven that would be an effective method.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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