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The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the Internet? What solutions can you suggest?

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I will choose number one, the
Internet
 had helped us
a lots
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of
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, because now, can you do many things
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 is interesting because for the people that haven't time, is very easy , for the people who are working , they can pass and study at the same time . Another
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 is you can do bank transactions
,
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 before it was
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impossible
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,
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because it was another time , now just put
your
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 passport and finish!
Therefore
 the
internet
 is very important ,
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I communicate with my sister , she lives in France , that country is very far, but it isn't impossible to talk
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 before for can talk
someone
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 it was very expensive maybe I don't remember well but it was Bs.5 or Bs.10 for one minute , now with
Internet
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 it is easier and cheaper , that can do using the
aplication
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application
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! There
are
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 a lot
machine
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 that
use
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internet
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 , there is the smart light , that only programs and turn on!. The
internet
 is very important, in the pandemic we were informed about the world ,
it
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 was fast because we used the
internet
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  • revolutionized
  • instantaneous communication
  • social media platforms
  • virtual meetings
  • e-commerce
  • global marketplaces
  • streaming services
  • online gaming
  • content creation
  • remote working
  • cyberbullying
  • internet addiction
  • access to information
  • professional development
  • privacy concerns
  • educational resources
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