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Some people are of the opinion that food should be transported from one place to the other, while others are of the opinion that people should consume locally produced food. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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The
anxiety
 levels of
children
 who played video games were equal to those of
children
 who received midazolam, and both groups were less anxious than those who watched cartoons while they entered the operating room. The rationale for
this
 is they are prevented from viewing television, which may cause them to become more conscious of their surroundings, which in turn raised their level of worry. When compared to baseline,
anxiety
 levels during mask induction were lower in
children
 who received midazolam as well as in
children
 who played video games. Only
children
 who watched a cartoon had increased
anxiety
. The results of the experiment found clear support for playing video games to decrease preoperative
anxiety
 levels in
children
 rather than midazolam which has a side effect.
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