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Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff. What you heard about the inconvenience from the staff How you feel about it What suggestion you can give

#manager #request #cafeteria #staff #inconvenience #suggestion
Dear Mr. Tom, I am writing
this
 letter to pay your attention to setting up a
cafeteria
 for the
staff
 employed in the office building. As you know, more than 200 management
staff
 have been working in your esteemed organization in different sections. Most of the
staff
 bring their tiffin and lunch from home as the company doesn't have any food facilities for their employees free of cost.
However
,
staff
 are unable to have their tiffin or lunch in a specific area
due to
 not having any
cafeteria
 in the office at present. As a multinational company, it is our prime responsibility to ensure a designated area for a well-equipped
cafeteria
 so that all the
staff
 can take their tiffin and lunch in their respective break time. But it is a matter of sorrow that I have been feeling disappointed
due to
 not having a
cafeteria
 in our company. I would like to suggest one idea about the
cafeteria
. We may set up a
cafeteria
 on the rooftop as there is plenty of space to arrange
this
. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon regarding
this
 matter. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Faisal
Submitted by faisalmahamood on

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coherence cohesion
Consider structuring the letter into clear paragraphs with each paragraph addressing a separate point. This would typically include an introduction, the nature of the inconvenience, personal feelings, and a suggestion or request.
task achievement
Make sure the letter includes not only a suggestion, but also outlines the potential benefits of the cafeteria and how it could alleviate the current inconveniences faced by staff.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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