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Overpopulation in most developing countries in Asia and Africa is a problem. If these countries do not try to control the population immediately, they will face serious problems. What are your suggestions to control the population?

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The world already has an unendurable
population
 and the highest percentages of them live in Asia and Africa. Poverty, corruption, pollution and diseases are epidemics in these parts of the world and the higher populace is the main reason for it. If the
population
 in these two continents are not controlled, the problems would completely get out of hand and
this
 essay suggests some ways of curbing the expansion of the
population
. The terribly higher
population
 density, poverty, unemployment and other social problems have already made it tough for Asian and African
countries
 to progress and the increasing
population
 growth makes the future even more uncertain there. Higher populations in some developed
countries
 are seen as a blessing while it is not the case in most Asian and African
countries
 as most of their citizens are uneducated and unskilled. To
control
 the
population
, the
first
 step has to come from the government. The authority should restrict the number of children a family can have, and violation of
this
 policy should be severely punished.
Countries
 like China have already adopted
this
 policy and have been able to
control
 their
population
 to a certain extent.
Besides
, the citizens have to realise the negative effects of the uncontrolled
population
 and spontaneously take birth
control
 measures. Without the support of the ordinary
population
, the government alone cannot
control
 it. Above all, international organisations like WHO, UNDP and other humanitarian organisations should work in these
countries
 to educate people about the negative consequences of higher
population
 growth.
Besides
, they should provide funds for birth
control
 in these
countries
. In conclusion, the higher
population
 in poor
countries
 is a big threat, and, oftentimes, the main hindrance to true progress. The government, ordinary people and international organisations should work together to
control
 the rapid
population
 growth in these
countries
. Without a combination of policy, awareness and a free flow of funds, it would be impossible to help those
countries
control
 their
population
.
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