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Overpopulation in most developing countries in Asia and Africa is a problem. If these countries do not try to control the population immediately, they will face serious problems. What are your suggestions to control the population?

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The world already has an unendurable
population
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 and the highest percentages of them live in Asia and Africa. Poverty, corruption, pollution and diseases are epidemics in these parts of the world and the higher populace is the main reason for it. If the
population
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 in these two continents are not controlled, the problems would completely get out of hand and
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. The terribly higher
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 density, poverty, unemployment and other social problems have already made it tough for Asian and African
countries
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 to progress and the increasing
population
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 growth makes the future even more uncertain there. Higher populations in some developed
countries
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 are seen as a blessing while it is not the case in most Asian and African
countries
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 as most of their citizens are uneducated and unskilled. To
control
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 the
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, the
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 step has to come from the government. The authority should restrict the number of children a family can have, and violation of
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 policy should be severely punished.
Countries
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 like China have already adopted
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 policy and have been able to
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 their
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 to a certain extent.
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, the citizens have to realise the negative effects of the uncontrolled
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 and spontaneously take birth
control
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 measures. Without the support of the ordinary
population
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, the government alone cannot
control
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 it. Above all, international organisations like WHO, UNDP and other humanitarian organisations should work in these
countries
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 to educate people about the negative consequences of higher
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 growth.
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, they should provide funds for birth
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 in these
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. In conclusion, the higher
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 in poor
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 is a big threat, and, oftentimes, the main hindrance to true progress. The government, ordinary people and international organisations should work together to
control
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 the rapid
population
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 growth in these
countries
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. Without a combination of policy, awareness and a free flow of funds, it would be impossible to help those
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control
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 their
population
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