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Tobacco should be treated as illegal like other drugs. Smoking has not a single positive issue but lots of negative effects and therefore, it should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the above statement.

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Tobacco
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 is a legal drug around the world. Taking into consideration smoking has highly negative effects on the body and that
habit
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 can be harmful. Thereby countries should treat
tobacco
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 as an illegal drug like class A drugs of the serious
harm
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 it causes. Throughout the years, smoking has been seen as a luxury
habit
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. In the 60s, smokers were seen as the high society, which created a big impact on how people perceived the use of the substance. In the same way as wearing an expensive watch, smoking was
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 a sign of wealth
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 that perception impacted how a society built the
habit
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 of smoking daily, at parties, meetings and dinners.
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, science has proven smoking can cause serious
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 to the body. People who smoke are more likely to develop cancers an example is lung cancer.
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, not only for those serious health issues but
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 for countries with free health care, it is a high cost for the government to treat those citizens when that money could be invested in other areas.
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, the point is smoking just leads to other substance use, it can destroy families and have a big negative impact on a group of people.
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, pregnant mothers who smoke can
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 their fetuses, and parents who smoke give a bad example for their children. Not forget smoking
tobacco
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 is an expensive
habit
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, and that can cause even more
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 to a household.
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, I do agree that
tobacco
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 should be treated as an illegal drug like other class A drugs like cocaine and heroin, as it can bring serious health issues
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 there are no positive points to smoking and it should be banned.
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