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some schools are very strict about their school uniform and appearance of their pupils, when other schools have a very relax dress code. what are the advantage and disadvantage of children having school uniform?

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Introduction
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student
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education in
education
educationin
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education in
british
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different
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different
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education
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 and part-time
education
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overall,the number of
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students
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gender
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a steady
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choosing
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male
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to begin
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with
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in terms
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in terms
 of part-time
education
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 was the highest level of
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student
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students
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female
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 where they reached
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1100 students
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approximately
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approximately
 in 1990
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in1970student
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choosing
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choosing
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females
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femals
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females
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thenfollowed
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then followed
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studentnext
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student next
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year
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part -time
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education
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beginning
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 with 1000 in 1970
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71,after
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gradually
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gradually
decling
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declining
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 to 900 in 1980
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before
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before
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proportion
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on
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other
on the
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onther
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other
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education
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noticeable
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that
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increased progressively in two
female
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females
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male
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males
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,but it started
by
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 50 students in1970
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71 for
female
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then
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 it had
growen
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grown
 by 200 students in 1980
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incontrast
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in contrast
male
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males
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higher
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student
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by
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of
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 100 than
female
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 and it
also
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 soard gradually until reaching 300
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student
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students
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 in 1990
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91.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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