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Some people say that using animals to test new products for human consumption should be banned in all countries. To what extent do you agree? Give clear arguments and examples to state your stance.

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It is true that
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medicines
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medicins
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medicines
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 and other products always
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animals
experiment
 in many countries before they are used for
human
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humans
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. While I tend forward the viewpoint that using
animals
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animal
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 testing is wrong
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in
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 ethical perspective, I would have to agree that these experimentations for
development
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 of
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medicines
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medicins
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medicines
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 are helpful for human life. On one hand, some people suppose that using
animals
 for testing new products
are
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 morally wrong.
For example
: people
use
 laboratory mice to try a new drug, it may be given an illness to be sure that the medicine is
work
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. Non-supporters
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agree
argue
agure
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argue
 that humans have no right to treat
the
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animal like that and
the
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that the
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 lives of every
creatures
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 should be respected. They
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that the benefits of humans should not
based
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 on the suffering of the
animals
 and
scientists
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that scientists
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 should
use
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alternative
altenative
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alternative
way
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ways
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 to
experiment
.
On the other hand
,
the
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alternative ways of experimentation are not always available. The supporter of using
animals
 for testing suppose that
,
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 using a limited laboratory
rat
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rats
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 and mice to
experiment
 is reasonable because the results of
this
 research can save human lives. There are many
vacxins
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vaccines
, drugs … for humans
are
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that are
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 developed through the
use
 of
animals
experiment
. The opponents should reconsider if their family member needed a medical
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treatment
treament
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treatment
 that has been developed using animal
experiment
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experiments
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. I personally agree with the banning of using
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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 for testing non-medical products but I think it is
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necessary
nessesary
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necessary
 to
use
this
 method for
the
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important medical testing. In
sumarize
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summarize
, it
seem
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 to me that
the
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using animal
experiment
 for
importance
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 medical research should not be
band
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banned
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 until
the
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scientists find
the
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an
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 alternative method.
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