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Some people say that using animals to test new products for human consumption should be banned in all countries. To what extent do you agree? Give clear arguments and examples to state your stance.

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It is true that
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medicines
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medicins
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 and other products always
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animals
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experiment
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 in many countries before they are used for
human
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. While I tend forward the viewpoint that using
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animals
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 testing is wrong
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in
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 ethical perspective, I would have to agree that these experimentations for
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 of
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medicines
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medicins
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medicines
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 are helpful for human life. On one hand, some people suppose that using
animals
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 for testing new products
are
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 morally wrong.
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 laboratory mice to try a new drug, it may be given an illness to be sure that the medicine is
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. Non-supporters
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agree
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agure
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argue
 that humans have no right to treat
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animal like that and
the
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 lives of every
creatures
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 should be respected. They
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that the benefits of humans should not
based
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 on the suffering of the
animals
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 and
scientists
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that scientists
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 should
use
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alternative
altenative
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alternative
way
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 to
experiment
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.
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alternative ways of experimentation are not always available. The supporter of using
animals
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 for testing suppose that
,
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 using a limited laboratory
rat
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rats
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 and mice to
experiment
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 is reasonable because the results of
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 research can save human lives. There are many
vacxins
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vaccines
, drugs … for humans
are
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 developed through the
use
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 of
animals
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experiment
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. The opponents should reconsider if their family member needed a medical
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treatment
treament
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treatment
 that has been developed using animal
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experiment
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experiments
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. I personally agree with the banning of using
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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 for testing non-medical products but I think it is
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necessary
nessesary
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necessary
 to
use
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this
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 method for
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important medical testing. In
sumarize
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summarize
, it
seem
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 to me that
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using animal
experiment
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importance
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 medical research should not be
band
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banned
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 until
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scientists find
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 alternative method.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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