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Some people think adults should give children freedom to make mistakes. Others think adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Few folks think that
children
 have to
mistakes
 and the parents give freedom to youngsters to make
mistakes
. Whereas opponent says that adults prevent
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pupils from making
mistakes
.
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views along with my opinion. To embark with , it is necessary for
children
 to make
mistakes
 while doing activities, because when they
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 they learn how to do
this
 activity. During
learning
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 they can
mistakes
 and try to
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 their work without making
mistakes
.
For
instance
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 when
a pupils
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pupils
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joined
new
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 school or they start talking to others at the same time they do
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penalty
plenty
pnelty
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plenty
 of
mistakes
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a
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time
he
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 reduced
his
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mistake
 and speak
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 in a frequent way .It is done because of
mistakes
.
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mistakes
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 by
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children
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children
 if
he
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 make
mistakes
 in early times and
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right
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 work in the future.
On the other hand
, every coin
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 two sides.opponents who believe that youngsters have to prevent young ones to do
not
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mistakes
. I
am not fully agree
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 with
this
 statement but if pupils are doing
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mistake
regular
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then
 adults have to see because if
he
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 do regular
mistakes
 in routine
then
children
 became habitual of that habit and never do that activity in
a
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 correct way .
for example
a
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children
 when start speaking at that time he is not speaking in a correct way ,if
this
 speaking habit not changed
then
 he
speak
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 that word wrong in his full life. To sum up, it is important to make
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 while doing activities but it
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also
 be in mind that
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mistake
do
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 his habit.
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