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You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion.

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Dear
Mr.
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 Mark I am writing a letter with regard to your article about
that
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town
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centers
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 in Saudi Arabia sharing a quite level of similarities. I have been doing tours in Jeddah for a long time and I like reading about
towns
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centers
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 since these
the
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 most interesting places I do tours at . Concerning that, I totally support your point of view that these
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centers
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 have profoundly the same interior design. I believe the reason lies behind
this
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 identical style is that the developer company deals with the same interior designer for all the
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, which to some extent is not a positive feature.
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, the high ceiling, arrangement of shops and green plants all over the
place
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 give the feeling of lacking distinction and you could barely recognize which
center
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 you are in, and
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this backups
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 your view about lacking “Uniqueness”, Alnakeel
center
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 is one of the wonderful
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centers
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 in my
place
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. It is a way different from all the
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centers
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 that I have been to. An
opened
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 ceiling is an outstanding feature that makes it unique and extraordinary.
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, the food court has been developed recently and many well-known
cafe
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 has joined the
place
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 which
make
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a
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perfect
place
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 for family and friends to meet and chat.
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, if your schedule fits a quick visit to Jeddah, I would be thrilled and delighted to invite you to join our tour where we will discover the new places in town. Luckily,
next
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 weekend marks the opening of the new luxurious cinema and we are planning to make it
as
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our
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first
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 stop
of
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 our tour. Looking forward
for
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 your visit where we can explore Jeddah together. Best Regards, Maha Aldosari
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