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In the last century, urban development has focused on building tall building as opposed to wide flat ones. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of a variety of devices used by Canadian people watching television in 2009 and 2019. Overall, the percentage of Canadians using conventional TV, desktop computers and laptops exhibited upward trends, whereas those watching flat-screen TV, tablets and mobile phones showed a decline in the period given. In 2009, people accessing conventional TV saw the greatest difference between the years provided. It made up the largest part of watching television, at just over one-
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 and fell dramatically to only 4% in 2019, which took the
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 place.
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, at the start of the time desktop computers and laptops were 18% and 12% but the figures saw a drop to only 12% each at the end of the period.
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, the use of flat screens was 8% in 2009, and
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 it went up to over three times after 10 years.
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, the proportion of using tablets accounted for 1 in 20;
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, it showed a significant growth to almost one-fifth. It is worth noting that cell phones were 15% and increased by 11% in 2019.
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