Some people think that robots are very important for humans' future development. Others, however, think that robots are dangerous inventions that could have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

These days,
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robots
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with advanced technologies are
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. Meanwhile, different opinions about them are pointed out that they are considered to be advantageous,the other side being dangerous, to
human
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being
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. Considering they can increase the length of human life .I think
robots
are very important for humans' future development and will benefit
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human
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.
First
of all, some people think that the sheer use of
robots
will lead to a lack of electricity.
Nevertheless
,
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robots
will be more and more power-efficient
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the accumulation of technology,which has been confirmed by a great number of scientists researching
robots
constantly and
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by them in many science magazines.
In addition
, they
also
explained another profound idea that
robots
would completely control
human
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is extremely impossible,for the simple reason that
robots
could do nothing without electricity controlled by
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thoroughly even though they would be
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powerful and intelligent.
Robots
can be used in sorts of fields,some of them being dangerous. We can imagine that If
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broke out at a dilapidated chemical factory with a great deal
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explosive
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inside, not only would it be inaccessible, but it would be extraordinarily precarious for firemen to put the fire out.
However
, extinguishing it with
robots
would be fairly safe for
human
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,which
contribute
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to the increase of human lives to some extent.
In addition
,
robots
can be used in some precise operations that patients with severe diseases need. An experienced surgeon,
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also
human,
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make a big mistake leading to the death of the patient,
nevertheless
,a robot set exactly by
program
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will not.
This
is another example that
illustrate
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the idea. I consider that the use of
robots
will be inevitable and effective for human development. I have even foreseen
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era when
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robots
do every dangerous work belonging to
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originally.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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