Some people think the best way to improve road safety is to increase minimum legal age for driving cars and motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the continuous improvement of urban
traffic
.Most citizens
reckon ought
to improve Correct pronoun usage
that ought
traffic
safety
by increasing minimum
legal age of drive Correct article usage
the minimum
cars
and motorcycles.I agree
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onagree
toagree
withagree
this
opinion and I will elaborate on this
problem from the perspective of accident incidence and dangerous driving behaviour of senior citizens
!
First
of all.Senior citizens
don’t have perfect awareness of law
and Correct article usage
the law
sense
of Social responsibility.Correct article usage
a sense
This
will lead to a frequent phenomenon that senior citizens
will ignore laws and do
not care about the Unnecessary verb
apply
safety
of others.Gradually,there will be more dangerous situations on
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in
the
all of the Correct article usage
apply
traffic
systems.For instance
,underage seniors
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senior
citizens
drive cars
or motorcycles on a road with Speed
limit of 60 kilometres per hour and ignore the Add an article
a Speed
traffic
regulations to reach a higher speed.this
action could give rise to car accidents and even some citizens
were injured.As well as bring badness and property damage to both family
.Change to a plural noun
families
consequently
,The happiness index of citizens
will decline accordingly
and Accidents
incidents will be Change the noun form
Accident
a
upward trend.Certainly ,that’s so unfeasible!
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an
on the other hand
.senior citizen
always overestimates driving
ability by themselves,Underestimate the dangers on the road，Unable to make a correct judgement Correct pronoun usage
their driving
on
emergencies, as Change preposition
in
result
Correct article usage
a result
of
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apply
senior
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a senior
the senior
citizen
is not enough
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have enough
experience
.senior Add the particle
to experience
citizen
usually listening Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
music
,Change preposition
to music
chatting
,Wrong verb form
chat
watching
movies.playing iPhone With friends in the car.so that cannot focus on driving Correct word choice
and watching
cars
.if an accident occurs.senior
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a senior
citizen
can’t even react.sometimes senior Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
citizen
will imitate dangerous plots in the movie.they imagine themselves as Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
protagonist
in the movie and drive at high speed!as well as regardless of the feelings of others!
To sum up.As Add an article
the protagonist
a protagonist
result
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a result
of
legal awareness and social Change preposition
apply
security
responsibility are not perfect for Add a comma
,security
seniors
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senior
citizens
.and they maybe have some dangerous behaviour. so that it has a certain impact on traffic
safety
.I hold a firm belief that solving problem
of Add an article
the problem
improves
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improving
traffic
safety
that
best way is Correct determiner usage
the
increasing
Change the verb form
to increase
minimum
legal age Add an article
the minimum
of
driving Change preposition
for
cars
and motorists!Submitted by 185584258 on
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