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Some people think the best way to improve road safety is to increase minimum legal age for driving cars and motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #road #safety #age #cars #motorcycles
With the continuous improvement of urban
traffic
.Most
citizens
 reckon
ought
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that ought
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 to improve
traffic
safety
 by increasing
minimum
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the minimum
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 legal age of drive
cars
 and motorcycles.I
agree
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onagree
toagree
withagree
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this
 opinion and I will elaborate on
this
 problem from the perspective of accident incidence and dangerous driving behaviour of senior
citizens
!
First
 of all.Senior
citizens
 don’t have perfect awareness of
law
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the law
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 and
sense
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a sense
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 of Social responsibility.
This
 will lead to a frequent phenomenon that senior
citizens
 will ignore laws and
do
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apply
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not care about the
safety
 of others.Gradually,there will be more dangerous situations
on
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in
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the
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apply
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all of the
traffic
 systems.
For instance
,underage
seniors
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senior
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citizens
 drive
cars
 or motorcycles on a road with
Speed
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a Speed
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 limit of 60 kilometres per hour and ignore the
traffic
 regulations to reach a higher speed.
this
 action could give rise to car accidents and even some
citizens
 were injured.As well as bring badness and property damage to both
family
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families
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.
consequently
,The happiness index of
citizens
 will decline
accordingly
 and
Accidents
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Accident
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 incidents will be
a
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an
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 upward trend.Certainly ,that’s so unfeasible!
on the other hand
.senior
citizen
 always overestimates
driving
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their driving
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 ability by themselves,Underestimate the dangers on the road，Unable to make a correct judgement
on
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in
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 emergencies, as
result
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a result
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of
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apply
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senior
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a senior
the senior
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citizen
 is not
enough
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have enough
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experience
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to experience
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.senior
citizen
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citizens
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 usually listening
music
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to music
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 ,
chatting
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chat
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,
watching
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and watching
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 movies.playing iPhone With friends in the car.so that cannot focus on driving
cars
.if an accident occurs.
senior
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a senior
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citizen
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citizens
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 can’t even react.sometimes senior
citizen
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citizens
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 will imitate dangerous plots in the movie.they imagine themselves as
protagonist
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the protagonist
a protagonist
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 in the movie and drive at high speed!as well as regardless of the feelings of others! To sum up.As
result
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a result
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of
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apply
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legal awareness and social
security
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,security
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 responsibility are not perfect for
seniors
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senior
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citizens
.and they maybe have some dangerous behaviour. so that it has a certain impact on
traffic
safety
.I hold a firm belief that solving
problem
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the problem
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 of
improves
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improving
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traffic
safety
that
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the
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 best way is
increasing
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to increase
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minimum
Add an article
the minimum
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 legal age
of
Change preposition
for
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 driving
cars
 and motorists!
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