Some people think the best way to improve road safety is to increase minimum legal age for driving cars and motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the continuous improvement of urban
traffic
.Most
citizens
reckon
ought
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that ought
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to improve
traffic
safety
by increasing
minimum
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the minimum
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legal age of drive
cars
and motorcycles.I
agree
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onagree
toagree
withagree
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this
opinion and I will elaborate on
this
problem from the perspective of accident incidence and dangerous driving behaviour of senior
citizens
!
First
of all.Senior
citizens
don’t have perfect awareness of
law
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and
sense
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a sense
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of Social responsibility.
This
will lead to a frequent phenomenon that senior
citizens
will ignore laws and
do
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not care about the
safety
of others.Gradually,there will be more dangerous situations
on
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in
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the
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apply
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all of the
traffic
systems.
For instance
,underage
seniors
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senior
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citizens
drive
cars
or motorcycles on a road with
Speed
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a Speed
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limit of 60 kilometres per hour and ignore the
traffic
regulations to reach a higher speed.
this
action could give rise to car accidents and even some
citizens
were injured.As well as bring badness and property damage to both
family
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.
consequently
,The happiness index of
citizens
will decline
accordingly
and
Accidents
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incidents will be
a
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upward trend.Certainly ,that’s so unfeasible!
on the other hand
.senior
citizen
always overestimates
driving
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their driving
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ability by themselves,Underestimate the dangers on the road,Unable to make a correct judgement
on
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in
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emergencies, as
result
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of
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apply
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senior
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citizen
is not
enough
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experience
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to experience
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.senior
citizen
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citizens
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usually listening
music
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,
chatting
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,
watching
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and watching
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movies.playing iPhone With friends in the car.so that cannot focus on driving
cars
.if an accident occurs.
senior
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a senior
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citizen
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citizens
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can’t even react.sometimes senior
citizen
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citizens
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will imitate dangerous plots in the movie.they imagine themselves as
protagonist
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the protagonist
a protagonist
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in the movie and drive at high speed!as well as regardless of the feelings of others! To sum up.As
result
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a result
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of
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apply
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legal awareness and social
security
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,security
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responsibility are not perfect for
seniors
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senior
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citizens
.and they maybe have some dangerous behaviour. so that it has a certain impact on
traffic
safety
.I hold a firm belief that solving
problem
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the problem
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of
improves
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improving
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traffic
safety
that
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the
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best way is
increasing
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to increase
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minimum
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the minimum
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legal age
of
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for
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driving
cars
and motorists!
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimum legal age
  • road safety
  • driving/riding
  • maturity
  • decision-making abilities
  • risky behavior
  • graduated driving programs
  • extended learning periods
  • strict testing
  • continuous education
  • advanced driver training
  • traffic laws enforcement
  • advanced driver-assistance systems (ADAS)
  • accidents reduction
  • statistical evidence
  • real-world examples
  • public awareness campaigns
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