Some believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high school program (for example working in a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports in younger children) How far do you agree or disagree.

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individuals that engaging in voluntary

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is obligatory in the syllabus of

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secondary education. Though there are some downsides, I concur with the given fact as it will aid to improve the quality of future generation and benefits the poor communities who are in need of assistance. On one

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competitive world, focused the majority of the academic

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merely focused on making the platform for

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students to reach

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greater heights rather than producing the citizens with

finest

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attitudes.

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, compulsive community services

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the future generation to

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and

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to interact with various economic groups.

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opportunity will lead them to understand how the real world is and would motivate them to be successful in their education.

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, participating in charitable activities and teaching the younger generation would

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for the poor to gain upward social mobility since they less educational facilities in their rural areas. To cite an example, schools in

countryside

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lack

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well-experienced tutors and sports

equipments

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eventhough they have talented pupils in

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sports.

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day-by day and taking part in community services would not be beneficial for the pupils to tackle

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this

crucial problem.

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academic institutions must prominently pay

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attention

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accomplishing the educational qualifications of the people

instead

of spending time

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extra curricular

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activities. On the whole, I agree that unpaid voluntary activities in the high school environment

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essential up to a great extent as it would encourage people to be good citizens which is much more beneficial to a certain country and at the same

time

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it will advantageous

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poor.