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more and more young people use internet to socialize .do you think it is a negative trend or positive trend?

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Nowadays, more and more teenagers use social media to socialize, talk to each other and find new friends, is
this
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 a bad trend or it has a good impact on young
people
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? I believe that it is a negative trend because more young
people
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 start to live their social
life
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 only on the
internet
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 and forget what is real
socialization
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.
Internet
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 and social media were created for
people
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 could interact and socialize with each other everywhere. Not for replacing real
socialization
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, because real conversations never are
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 as online ones.
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, more and more young
people
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 use the
internet
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 to socialize all the time
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 and lose their real
socialization
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. It is very disappointing, especially for older
people
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, that most teenagers, nowadays are glued to their phones and use the
internet
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 to socialize, ,
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consequently
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 they are not capable of real talk and social
life
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.
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, it is not only disappointing but, it is
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 very bad for their mental health and
life
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. Because
internet
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socialization
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 never can replace real
life
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.
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, most teenagers that have a lot of friends online, but do not have any in real, is very depressed and unhappy. In conclusion, it is a bad trend which has a negative effect on young
people
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, so it is important to stop it and have more real
socialization
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